Question:
What do u think about my peom??
I WOULD DO ANYTHING TO SEE YOUR PRETTY SMILE!
I WANT TO SEE YOUR FACE FACE AFTER MY TRAVLED MILES.
TE AMO MUCH, TE QUIERO MUCH, TE EXTRANO.
(i love u, i care for u, and i miss u)
MY TEARS HAVE FEARS OF YOUR DEATH BENETH ME.
I WISH U WERE BACK AND TELL ME YOU NEED ME.
I FEEL YOUR TOUCH, I FEEL U BESIDE ME ABUELITA.
I KNOW YOUR THEIR I KNOW YOUR HERE, YOUR ARE IN MY HEART.
ILL NEVER FORGET THOSE DAYS YOU DANCED JUST TO MAKE US
LAUGH. ILL REMEMBER THE DAYS UTHAT WE PRAYED
TO THE GOD WE LOVE, YES WE LOVE HIM!
CAUSE YOUR HEART WAS FULL OF HIM.
I WAIT TO MEET YOU AGAIN IN THE HEAVENS YOU'RE IN.
STAY BENETH ME, STAY BESIDE ME, DONT LEAVE!
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DIS POEM GOES TO MY GRANDMA' THAT DIED ON OCTOBER 2,2006
I LOVED HER SO MUCH!!... I MADE THIS POEM JUST FOR HER!
R.I.P. TERESA ALVAREZ *AKA* ABUELITA TERE
is it good??? be 100% honest plz!!
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Your grandmother would be proud, of being loved this way by you. Keep learning about poetry! You have described your love for her very clearly. The only way you can become better is to practise and to learn english or just write poems in spanish because it is a more solid language for you. to express yourself better. Remember you do not have to rhyme, you have to use words that flow with one another. Peace and all the best in life.