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What do you guys think of my poem? It's kind of an apology poem thingy...?

i call it..."i am of the wise."



i'm not gonna start with "roses are red,"/
because stuff like that is overplayed. /
and i can't begin with a wish,/
because i've already got it made./
but i will say that there's a/
different shade for every color./
"every rose has its thorn" /
is what people say bout their significant other./
the truth is , its not the thorn that hurts,/
but the way you hold the stem. /
take care of your own flower,/
and it becomes a most precious gem./
but no, i wont start with "roses are red"/
nor will i end with an "i love you." /
cuz you know its true, even when it goes unsaid,/
that there's more than one way to prove i love you./
when the pain from the thorns set,/
only the fool gets mad at the rose. /
its the wise who are willing to accept/
that through only their own grip the pain arose./


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

This poem is exceptional. you have an aa bb cc (etc) rhyming scheme going on every other lline, which I find really cool since I have only seen a few people do it successfully. your style is pretty much consistant. The last two lines are wonderful! you did great on your poem. title's nice and vague too.