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A new poem..what do you think?

No no, this can't be true
you couldnt have died at this age of 22

I can't hear you rev up ur engine when
ur trying to say "hi"
And I will no longer see you in walmart
parking lot when we are passing by
God we all told u it would happen smeday
But why did it have to be this way?

U being gone is still so unreal 2 us.
getting a phone call wondering what is
all the fuss.

Then finding out ur gone forever
Thoughts then flooding my mind about when we were all together

I know 1 is dieing inside
her mind keeps going back to that painful ride
her heart screams out in pain
b/c her love for u is now going to drive her insane.
So how do u say goodbye
2 someone who can't reply.
Th is another one of those reasons friends shouldn't drink and drive

Ur not gone, I know it can't be true
I know it in my heart, cuz she's dieing w/o you.
Stop hiding from us
please come out and stop all the fuss.
We all know she isn't ready to say bye

4 months ago
cuz the only thing she's really saying is
Why?

U were her 1st true love
Now Im askin you watch over her from above.

TDB
More than a friend
More than a brother
2 some more than other

U will me missed &
U are 4 ever loved
ur smile will never fade
and your laugh will for ever stay

Rest In Peace

Brittany Dare Foy(c)2007

It's very sweet, although some lines feel forced in the process of rhyme overkill. You don't need to rhyme every two lines in order for your writing to be considered poetry.