My very first poem, what do you think?

Question:

My very first poem, what do you think?

here is the link

i would just like feedback // comments as it is my first poem. i do not write poems for fun, i do it because it helps me with life

http://www.lovelandia.com/archive/the_on...

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

MAKES ME THINK OF MY BOYFRIEND AND I THINK THINGS WILL GET BETTER FOR YOU.