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Simile Poem...would you rate it?

He's like a stone, cold and lifeless
As emty as shell
He's like an empty cave, dark and alone
As miserable as an abandoned child
So lonely; without hope

yes, not the best but i can only use similes...for my english class[[freshman]]
what do you think?
a bit too emo?

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4 months ago
yeah thanks [typo] ...

As empty as [a] shell


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Hi Mexicanguy,

Not bad. But why don't you change line three to read:

"He's empty like a cave -- dank and dark."

Cheers, mate.