What are you comments ......... about this.....?

Question:

What are you comments ......... about this.....?

suffer
you hold my leg w/ u crying
you slice my heart with your hopeness
you tie my neck with your ways
you break my brain with your power
you take all my life with your black hand
you kill all people that i love with your sing
suffer....
empty....
dying.....
please, let me die...
cause i don't want life beside you...

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Wow. That's a really powerful poem with some intene & heavy imagery. The fifth line sounds a bit odd to me. The cause of this deep & painful emotion isn't defined, & I would like it more if it was.