Can i get your honest opinion on this poem?

Question:

Can i get your honest opinion on this poem?

i want your honest opinion on this. i know it seems kinda elementary but what do u think. honestly.........................

I WISH,
i wish my life would just pass by
i wish that i could sovle the worlds problems
and that u wouldnt look at me that way
i wish i could destroy all peer pressure
just like. i wish it was cool to want to be yourself
i wish that i will never ever dissapoint my family,
in any way shape or form
i wish that these wishes would come true,
so that i could wish to help you
i wish that you would just understand
i wish you would just listen
i wish that i could dream again.
i wish that it wasnt so damn hard, to say what i feel
i wish that this wasnt good bye

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

if wishes were horses,. . . . i wish you could simply write u as 'you' and I as that without small letters. as it is, one thinks you are just playing with words, not serious. the idea of 'u' deflates you core wishes. after closing the page, i could barely tell what exactly your point was! unless there is a good effect for it, consider the appropriateness of deploying such slang expressions as 'damn'. what exactly is so damn hard to say?
otherwise the poem sounds fine to me.