Question:
Another poem, tell me what u think please?
Your in pain but do not show it.
Your in love but do not know it.
Tying hard to not shed the tears from long ago.
It seems as though there is no place to go.
All you want to do is dissapear with out a trace.
Thinking life is just a race against death,
being blinded by the world around you. y
ou are in pain,
afraid to shed the tears that have been kept in.
you hide because of the shame that has been brought,
why cant you just show that you are in pain,
or do you really want to die in vain.
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
You really need to pay attention to proper spelling ... your misspellings are far too many to 'list' here. And you also need to write a 'good poem' which means it 'shows' the feelings, and not 'talks about them indirectly' ... as your piece does.
I did read it all the way through, though ... and if you are hoping someone 'notices' what you are saying here, I DID ... if you want some REAL HELP (for you or someone you know) you should go to any 'mental health organization' and ask for an 'evaluation' ... and I am sorry for the 'pain' ... THERE IS HOPE, but you must be 'willing to reach out' in a REAL WAY. I hope you do!