Question:
Critque plz?????????
this is my poem and i wanna kno what u think.
As my tears fall down
like atumn leaves
deep inside
my soul grieves
As the clouds roll by
and time goes on
I wonder when the sun will rise
and the sunlight shall dawn
I feel so cold
like mid-winter snow
I miss the Spring
and watching the flowers grow
I kno not when the weather changed
or why it happened this way
All i have to hope for
Is the sunlight bringing a new day
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
That's really great! Just work a little on the rhythm.