Do u like my poem so far? got any ideas 4 more of it? wot do u like about it and

Question:

Do u like my poem so far? got any ideas 4 more of it? wot do u like about it and wot u dont like bout it?

As your breathing slows,
you slowly realise that you know.
When your life will end,
no one will care but you lend your heart to a friend.
Your heart beats quicker,
but you are scared that its the liquor!

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

u wanta run a mile,
but ur not sure,