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Just tell me what you think of my poem!?

STraight up, just tell me what you think. I don't discriminate. Lemme know which you like best, any why (but only if u wanna share!)

Love's Lacking Cry

I never thought I'd have to push and shove,
just for a bit of my father's love.
He never called me 'Daddy's little girl",
Never spun me in a childish twirl.
He never read me a tale from my favorite story book,
Never helped me make a clubhouse in a small corner nook.
He never danced with me in the rain,
Never kissed away the pain.
He never took me to the rink to skate,
But now its too late.

He never crossed the street, and held my hand tight,
never chased away the monsters in the middle of the night.
He never looked at me in awe with pride,
never came to comfort me when I cried.
So how come I feel his arms around me,
after he's died?

2 months ago
Hey, everyone, just so you know-
-this is NOT about me.
-I wrote this poem
-I'm 13

2 months ago
1- Do you like it? Why?
2- Should I submit it to my LA teacher (not for grades, just for commentary)
3- Got a better title??

Especially since you are only 13, I think that you did a really great job. Every once in a while I get a stroke of genious as well. :)

I would want to change the title of it though. But Im not sure to what.

:)