Would someone please read my contempary piece & tell me you think?

Question:

Would someone please read my contempary piece & tell me you think?

Would someone mind reading my contempary piece & tell me what they think?

I would put it here but it's too long & I want a serious answer.
I have to write 2 contempary pieces post 19th century for an audtion on Saturday. I have just finished one & would like someone to read it & tell me what they think.
If you can help please send me an IM (write yahoo answers, because I ignore people!) or email me & i'll send it to you.
Thanks in advanced. xoxox

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3 weeks ago
KittyKat, your user preferences are set not to recieve emails. If you IM me I'll pass it on to you too look at.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Very good.