What do you think of my Poem?

Question:

What do you think of my Poem?

WANDERING IN A MAZE

Loneliness is his only companion
No rain of love in his sky
Assuming it will, it will someday
Strives he to keep his sanity
Struggling to keep his mind pure
In spite of all his efforts
He fails again and again,
His mind is tainted with jealousy
When he sees others falling in love

Composed by Rishikaysh

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Wow, that's really good. You might want to rephrase "No rain of love in his sky" I'm a little confused by that but none-the-less it's really good.