Question:
I wrote this peom what do you think???
1 shot 2 shot 3 shot 4 5 shot 6 shot 7 shot more
a flying fist kills the mans wife
a little boy watching as he comits suidie with a knife
at the funral people cry
but no one remebers the little boy that didn't die
he crys behing the back cherch pew
waiting for his hero to come to the rescue
a man no older then 32
finds him crying behind that pew
next thing you no adoption papers are coming
2 years later the boy still wakes up crying
remebering that night
that great stuggle that great fight
crawls into bed with his foster parents coferting him and telling him it will be alright
but as the boy grows older he will find the hurt grow more
intill the day he finds that one person that he greatly adores
that boy now is a man
he hade this plan
july 13 his daughter was born
looking into her eyes he promised himself
he will never drink
no matter wat people might think
he dosn't care
he dosn't want his daughter to have memories haunt
her like he hade had over the years
all those thoughts all those fears
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I can almost see a personal experience in this poem. It's to real and sounds like something only one who has known can write. Hope I am wrong. however, it is very sad, and loving at the same time.