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Is this a good poem? Critic me, tell me what to improve, tell me what was great?

anger
you gave me this anger
you pinned me to the ground and
took advantage of my virginity
scarrd me, scared me
made me lonely
brother, it was you that caused it
but now i we've become close
our love is great
you moved away from our home
and now i miss you
how did it come from
ultimate hatred
to sibling love
I'll never know
but my anger for you
is now unconditional love
no matter what happens,
no matter where you are
no matter what happened in the past
you're still my brother,
your still my friend

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8 months ago
my poems are ment to repeat things, it's supposed to add some sort of repetition in your mind, sort of like a verse in a song..


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I like it... its good