Yay, another one, I was bored in class today so I started coming up with all the

Question:

Yay, another one, I was bored in class today so I started coming up with all these. The atmosphere helped too.

A hidden truth,
compressed by fate.
A hidden heart,
buried in dust.

Darkness and light,
under one roof.
Under one sky,
hid in battle.

Roses are red,
violets are blue.
Humans are sweet,
That's sooo not true.

Ok, I admit this is not one of my best poems, I think there's soemthing wrong with lines 4 and 8. If you have any suggestions, please just tell me.

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7 months ago
Hey I like the last verse, =P

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

"Buried in dust" could become "Shoved in dust" and possibly "Hid in Battle" could be changed to "Hidden in battle" sometimes the poem writes itself. It doesn't want to have the words changed and your perception of the poem changes over time. Sometimes things are best left as they are. Excuse the use of a quote which I can't quite think of where it came from. Well keep up the good work.