Question:
What do you think of the poem i made?
The moon rises
shining stars fill the sky
lights in darkness
but all I have is
tears of sadness.
Your words go out
like daggers breaking
into my heart.
My soul is bleeding
I see you leaving
fading away with
the shadows of the trees
Oh Moon, light
my soul like you
light the night sky.
Oh Wind, take away
the pain I feel.
Before I fall into
the darkness of
the shadows.
I don't really think it's good and i don't like it that much.
What do you think?? Any suggestions??
Thank You
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
if you didn't think it was good you wouldn't have posted it....you just want compliments....which is cool....no biggie...i do it too! lol
i like it....it could use better phrasing....but otherwise...the message is clear....good job bud!