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Another poem: Is this a good one?

I'm basically putting up some of my poems to see if they're worthy of showing other people...apart from here i suppose

I walked alone today,
heated fire in my chest
gone out the day before
Minor fight, the anger
reflective of something more.

Now today, I walk
shivering, scared and alone,
far out in the cold.
I think of how lost I am
with no one, no friend, no griop, no hold.

A contrast, it was
to find an old friend
and ride with him home.
Is it the same for you,
hurt, then cold, now that your spirit as flown?

I pause, pressed
hearing the news now,
your passing definite.
And wonder at time,
metaphor, to walk roads on it.

If anything, I see
the burn in my chest
the stroke of the clock,
being out in the cold,
like death, alone in that walk.


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

you got talent,keep on !!!!!!