Is this a good start to a poem?

Question:

Is this a good start to a poem?

Just randomly deicded to write a poem but Ive never been into poetry... Is this a good start in you opinion:

Breathed in
Breathe out
And on that baited breath time passess....

Any suggestions welcome :-)

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Thats not a great start but it works I have had two poems accepted on poetry.com