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My friend wrote this and wants some opinons on it?

you are my everything
i would do anything, for you
you are the smile on my face
and my grace
if only you knew how i felt for you
i see you and my heart sinks for you
god could have not made a more beutiful girl
you are my everything
you are the sweet in my tooth
you are the smile on my face
you are my reason to live
you are my everything
when i see you, i just want to say
you are my world
i would do anything, for you
i would die for you
i love you, more than you will ever know
you are the love of my life
i just wish you could know
that you are my whole

so what do you think, she wants compete honesty


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

You can evaluate the sweet sentiment yourself, I think. But the poet says "god could have not made a more beutiful girl" - hmmm, is the poet writing about another girl? Or is this you writing it for a girl? Or what?

As a poem, though, it is pretty bad. No rhyme scheme, no meter, nothing much but repeated cliches.