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Is it good?do you like it or no?

Welcome to adult life

When black and white disappear
and life is just shades of Grey
when right and wrong are not that clear
and justice can be manipulated in a thousand way
i decided to live the sin for a while
forget faith let us live the devil's style
give me the hell number and I'll dial
it never worked the honest way
innocents have nothing to say
and life is getting boring day by day
let us do what we have always want
without people tell us do and don't
"am a sinner" write it by the largest font

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6 months ago
No english is not my first language


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

It's pretty good! I like the emotion behind it, and I especially like the first few lines.

You may want to try to write some non-rhyming poems, as that might let your meaning come through better (e.g. "a thousand way" doesn't make as much sense as "a thousand ways" would, but that's what has to be since it needs to rhyme with "Grey")

I also found the last couple lines a bit unclear... is English your first language?