Your opinion about my sonnet... thanx a lot!?

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Your opinion about my sonnet... thanx a lot!?

MEMENTO DOUBLE EGO

My mind keeps asking, pondering,
Wondering how it felt to witness pale
In cheeks and blue in lips; my soul
Quivers in grief and sorrow for he
Who innocent was of such discovery:
An inert prey of helpless despair,
One who endeavoured to blind life's fair
And thus with calm of own create new pain.

Poor Creator! The Eye of such deed!
To cause him such deep hurt, no need;
The earthly perpetrator of self doom
Has left a hopeless sigh on father gloom.
Though he bask in his ever-weeping tomb,
His souls and heir amongst us oft will loom.
AJ

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

hey! iam from france, and i didn't understand everything. that is to say, that i focused on the sounds, the rythm of the sentences, the fluency, the words as continuation of letters... and that makes your sonnet sounds beauteous. it's just lovely!!