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I just wrote this, what do you think??

My heart carries a deep apology
My eyes glisten with reminisce of tears.
No one can feel what I am feeling
??That I can not erase your fears

I want so much to make you happy again
I want to give you the sun and the stars.
There??s so much that you deserve to have,
But I only leave more scars.

What can I do to be the one that you want?
The one that you??ve dreamed of for so long.
Your every wish, your every fantasy
A woman who is strong.


Please show me the way to be the girl
That sweeps you off of your feet
To love each other forever more
To heal your heart that weeps.


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I think, the first section of the poem is above outstanding!!! It is far superior to the entire poem. But over all it is a very good poem. I really think the first section could win a prize in a poetry contest.