Question:
What do you think of my poem?
This is my second gothish poem. Tell me what you think.
Title: Eternal darkness
As i bask in the sun of death it slowly takes me away
the wind of the eternally perished reins over me
and throws me into a dark frigid cellar that engulfs my weakened body
the cranking of the chains lifting me off the cold and unforgiving floor
as i dangle so helpless the rats gnaw the skin from my bare feet
my body aches as the life leaves my submissive tomb
and my lifeless corpse sways in the darkest of corners.
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Hello. It's wonderful self-expression, though dark, but creative.
Take care and keep writing.