Is this poem fine the way it is or suggestions on to make it better?

Question:

Is this poem fine the way it is or suggestions on to make it better?

Comments and suggestions:

Bite of Seduction

I could feel

your breath

on my neck

soon you close your teeth

on my bare neck

and bit gently

the bite of seduction

my blood rushing with haste

my heart beating harder

I want you now

you have power within

that drives me to you

Bite of Seduction

Come into me

bite me more, absorb me

into you

I don't care how loud I scream

or how fast our hearts are beating

against each other

you got me

you own me

you bit me

Bite of Seduction

Nothing but sweat beads

nothing but flesh now

between us

This bite is lethal

Lick the blood clean

how long will this venom last

Don't stop

Bite of Seduction

I try to pull away

I get dizzy

but I cannot resist

Oh you own me baby

finish don't go now

Because you bit me with seduction

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

In my opinion, I don't think this one is complete. It is too disjunctive.
It may be better as a song.
Consider that?