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Opinions on my writing?

Here's a poem I wrote....honest (but respectful and SERIOUS) opinions please? I know it doesn't make a ton of sense but that's how it's meant to be to a certain degree. I'm almost 15 so don't expect it to be perfect.

Con[Temporary]

Cons outweigh the pros, haven't you heard?
In a flash the tried and true loses worth.
A single depicts the rise and fall of this empire,
But that's your aftermath for playing with fire.

You're just a filler song, downgraded by jet lag,
No need to win her over, she's temporarily stag.
Just mind the one-up king with what's up his sleeve,
The plague of absence seems to be rinsing you clean.

Backtrack now, who's hopeless and who's devoted?
You bluntly embellished it off, now dually noted.
He's the brains of the operation with smarts on parade,
You're meek with temptations and so likely to stray.
Costume design is primo, sans these complimentary wits.
Wherefore art thy postponing when the shoe doesn't fit?

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5 months ago
Dispose of the rose petals at a moment's decree,
Bumper to bumper but you're miles from the lead.
Now it's evident your game plan had a delayed start,
She's keen on you not; though don't take her to heart.
I'm afraid my verdict is worthless, impartial at best,
Merely an outsider peering in to lay hearsay to rest.

[Too many characters so I continued it]

5 months ago
This isn't my best poem at all, I just wasn't sure about it completely. I've been writing for like 5 years now and have written about 800+ poems and songs in the last few years.


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

"Applause!"...I very much enjoyed it! Very good. But my poetry professor said that in order to write good poetry you have to experience life, and that writers in general live short lives...poets the shortest.

But...continue on, you are very talented. I would suggest that you take lessons with a musical instrument that you like, or would love to learn, and write songs.

Take voice lessons to sing the songs, and you will end up a very good musician.

Try writing a short story. But write.

You must have a diary...so keep on keeping on!