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What do you think of my poem?

Happy Valentine Day,

You like a dream come true,
Let me name the ways,
You have the same personality I have,
You are beautiful,
You are funny,
You are lovable,
You are smart,
You are the bad boy type but good at the same time,
You impossible to say no to,
If I could only gave you one kiss,
I would be set for life,
I see fireworks,
All of my dream would come true,
I would never forget how it felt,
In case you want to know,
I write this for you,
You might think I crazy,
But I think you are to for me,
I??m crazy for you to,
You turn me on like no one else.

Would you be my valentine?
You are the only one for me.


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Robert,
It's a very sweet poem and the person for whom you wrote it is lucky!

It's wonderful raw material but, of course, most of the stuff anyone writes could use a little polish. You could strengthen it by doing a few things to it. If it were me I might try this:

You are like a dream come true,
The bad boy type, yet so good too
You: impossible to say "no" to.

One kiss from you and I'm set for life,
My eyes full of fireworks
Forgetting all strife...
...but never that moment,
that kiss.

You might think I'm crazy
...Crazy for you
I write this in hope
you're crazy for me, too.

For you make me feel like no one can
I write this in hopes you'll understand...

and be my Valentine.

I don't know, these are just some rough thoughts to get you going if you'd like.

What's most important is that it comes from you and your heart... nothing else (including my critique or suggestion) really matters