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Poems help/?

I wrote a war poem and i need help with this line because its too long but i don't know how to rephrase it to make it shorter. This is the line i need help on:

[A german soldier hurdled twoards me pointing his gun]

and the line under it is:

[I stood there frozen then started to run]

So basically it needs to have gun on the end so it can rhyme with 'Run'.

Thanx all the poets out there!!


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

The German soldier approached, aiming his gun...