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What do you think about this poem?????

hes the most beautiful garden
the most beautiful garden spoiled upon daisys
i picked at the stems so close too near
he gave and shook me with anger and fear
i understand the way i water his love
he bought the lady dancers and gave them a look instead
to my eyes he pushed and crazied me up
i fell on the edge he never held me up
even though i hated his ways
he stares and loves only on anniversary days
i layed on him with flowers galore
he shoved and raged my anger even more
but still i watch from the side of his gaze
and i wonder how anybody can watch him die away
to me hes there and my heart is stll aware
to him i stare and his heart i keep it there
and now i see how he blooms each day
because hes the most beautiful garden
the most beautiful garden spoiled upon daisies


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Ive read alot of poetry on this q&a and most of it is horrid. I really like this one. Its very deep and has emotions splattered all over it. I like your style and the way that you put it all out there but hid it in "the garden". You have some tallent and I think you should consider doing more with it. Use a little puncuation because that will help you to break the poem up a bit and give it that extra kick you are looking to show. I love the line "I understand the way I water his love" thats a great line and you have so many hidden meanings here. I would love to see more of your work. I think that you may get some negative feedback on this one because I think it may go right over some peoples heads but dont listen to them this poem is good.