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I'm writing a book!. What do you think of the plot!?
It starts out with 15 year old Kairi (Ki-Re) Sweetnam!. She is kinda an outcast and she cuts herself!. She has had a few troubles like he dad being murdered right infront of her and she accidentally killed her friend and her friend's baby!. 21 year old rockstar Kevin Wincester let fame get to his head now his band mates our sending him back to his roots in Wyckoff,NJ!. Where he meets Kairi who he used to tease as a kid and falls in love with her!. But they have a few problems!. Kevin has an arranged marriage to Italian mo!. Princess Hazel Montoya!. And Kevin's insane ex-girlfriend Danielle DeLana and her father try to hurt them!. Danielle raped Kevin when they were dating!. And she likes to cut people and drink their blood!. She thinks she's a vampire!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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Whoa! I was soooooooooo interested in your book!. It soundes full of romance and drama!!! I really loved it until you mentioned the vampire part!. Everyone is making vampire books these days and it just gets boring and annoying!. Choose another legendary creature- a wizard perhaps!? Or make your own creature, that would make your book great!
To be honest, not much!. Your spelling and grammar are atrocious, you need to get that sorted out or it will end up on the slush pile!. I think you need to steer clear of anything vampire-related until the 'Twilight' hysteria dies down!. You also need to concentrate a lot more on you main character before bringing lots of other characters in!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
confusing !. !. !. but okay =]Www@QuestionHome@Com
WOW!. Erm interesting!? !.!.!.it sounds like the Martina Cole books my Mam likes to read!.
That's one complicated plot but i would read it if it was published! Good luck with that!Www@QuestionHome@Com
ugh daniellle what went wrong with her lol!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.yah the plot is good!.!.!.!.!.its okay idk it feels like ive heard it before!.!.!.but its still goodWww@QuestionHome@Com
vampires are overrated!. write about dingos eating babiesWww@QuestionHome@Com
This plot is all over the place!. no publisher will touch it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
!.!.!.uh i got a little confusedWww@QuestionHome@Com
It might work!.
I would buy it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i thinks it's a great plot!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Your plot seems overly complicated!. What age group is this aimed at!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
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I like it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I think you have a good underlying idea, but I would maybe make your main characters have fewer problems!. Concentrate on one major problem like Kevin's ex-girlfriend and maybe skip the arranged marriage for him!. And for Kairi skip the cutting and drop either the father being murdered or her killing her friend and her friend's baby!. In the end you want people to root for the main characters to overcome the problems they have and if they have too many problems they become too victimized and unlikable!. If these people were real people might be able to get passed the problems to like the people if they are strong enough, but in a book the first impression will be hard to get past!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
OMG this is the dumbest thing I've ever heard!.
I mean!. Sorry!. I'm usually not this mean!.!.!.!.!.but oh GOD the plot is ALL OVER THE PLACE!. I don't know wth is going on, it's like you're trying to implement too many things into one story!. Oh so she murdered people, saw someone get murdered, is a freaking annoying emo, AND she's getting chases down by her SUPER FAMOUS BOYFRIEND'S exes!?
Idk this just seems sort of ridiculous!? I'd SERIOUSLY consider re-writing the WHOLE thing from scratch!.!.!.please!.!.
oh and the name of your main character is cliche because it's TOO uncommon!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
hmmmm id really prefer the girl to like punch walls and kick stuff
or damage herself with alcohol and cigarettes easing her pain!.
And possibly her drinking being the reason for accidentally killing her friend!.
Or anything else, because its so typical for people to become cutters
and it sounds pathetic when read!.
As for the "Danielle" character it sounds impossible that no one ever sent her to an asylum, maybe instead she can just try to prevent him
from ever having to see her, or attempt to murder the girl "Kairi"
by having her father do the killing!.
Other than that id buy it!.
These are just ideas, i doubt there better than yours, just think you could make up something way different, cause you have other Great ideas in the story!.Www@QuestionHome@Com