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chapter 1: http://www!.writerscafe!.org/writing/LizaA!.!.!.
chapter 2: http://www!.writerscafe!.org/writing/LizaA!.!.!.
chapter 3: http://www!.writerscafe!.org/writing/LizaA!.!.!.
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Position:Home>Books & Authors> Tell me what you think of my book?Question: Tell me what you think of my book!? Links:
chapter 1: http://www!.writerscafe!.org/writing/LizaA!.!.!. chapter 2: http://www!.writerscafe!.org/writing/LizaA!.!.!. chapter 3: http://www!.writerscafe!.org/writing/LizaA!.!.!. there short btw!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: wow, that IS a clever a story, in some ways its poorly written, and a bit confusing!. if the same person speaks twice you don't need to start a new line!. Lively is a bit unpredictable, shes either unnaturally friendly, or sarcastic and lazy!. but keep at it, i think the characters need to be a bit less beautiful, it seems that everyone has soft eyes and nice skin, and hair of either black (which is quiet rare) or blonde and brown!. but, it's a good story line, the ending is clever, i've never read anything quite like it!Www@QuestionHome@Com I read the first chapter!.!.!. well almost all of it, the story sounds week and is introduced too quick!. You need to do more work in the way you introduce the story and your protagonist!. Characterization is important so readers can identify themselves somehow with the characters in your book!. your book remind me of the twilight series, the girl's obsesion with a guy in her dreams might be interesting but the way is down right now is kind of lame, plus you have a couple of misspellings which shows you haven't proofread enough!. But don't give up, you put your sentences together very well and have a nice way of expressing yourself, don't force it!.!.!. Good try!!Www@QuestionHome@Com It's not bad, you have good ideas, it's just not compelling or special!. There were also quite a few grammar and usage errors!. From the very first line, the wordings felt awkward and forced, like you're trying too hard!. I apologize if this sounds harsh, but every author needs constructive criticism!.Www@QuestionHome@Com thats really good!. very interesting!. i like it!. keep writingWww@QuestionHome@Com the website is blockedWww@QuestionHome@Com *BARFS ALL OVER NEW DVD" Thanx alot!Www@QuestionHome@Com It sounds too much like Twilight!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com its goodWww@QuestionHome@Com wow!.!.!.!.!.!.gay!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com |