Can someone revise my thesis statement? i need to email my teacher today. The Ki

Question: Can someone revise my thesis statement!? i need to email my teacher today!. The Kite Runner novel!?

My thesis statement is about the book "The Kite Runner" and how the book is better than the movie!. well i think it is=]

The story was better portrayed in the book than the movie because it was more detailed, showed the character's thoughts behind the action and when reading the book i felt connected to the story!.

i was thinking about changing the last reason why i think the book is better!. Do you have any ideas!. please help me=[Www@QuestionHome@Com

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The kite runner was better portrayed in the novel rather than the movie, the novel allows us to envision more detail and showed the character's thoughts behind the action, thus providing a greater connection to the storyWww@QuestionHome@Com

It might not be a good idea to speak in the first person in your report, just because some teachers don't like it (although some teachers don't mind)!. So I would rephrase your last reason as being a consequence of your first two reasons!. "!.!.!. it provided greater detail and showed the thinking behind the character's actions, thus providing a greater connection to the story!." Something along those lines!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I found the book version preferable to the movie version because it was much more detailed, the character's thoughts and actions were better defined, and I felt more of a connection with the book!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

something like!.!.

The kite runner was better portrayed in the novel rather than the movie, the novel allows us to envision more detail and we can find more evidence for motive within the text!.

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i think that it is perfect and theres nothing wrong with it!.
Its your opinion nobody can tell you what u thinkWww@QuestionHome@Com