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Question: Can someone please give me a metaphore on how to describe a murderer!?
okay, well im writing this story for english and ive pretty much finished it, but, we have to put in a metaphor as the last sentence!.!. my story ends like this!.
He remembered the way her shrill voice pierced his ears as the razor-sharp blade found its way into her chest cavity impaling her!. The hot blood that oozed out onto his hands, the knife falling to the floor with a loud clatter, the way her limpid eyes swelled with tears, and the way her body became limp and lifeless as all color drained from her face, terrified him!. He was a killer, a cold blooded murderer!.______metaphor_________________!.!.!. the end!.
i need to put a metaphor at the end of it!. but i cant think of one!! can someone please help!?!!?!!?
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A killer so cold like the icy wraths of insanity-ridden chains!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
She was now a china doll, cold and white and porcelain!.
Joker- anything with "like" or "as" is a simile, not a metaphor, and the teacher will probably dock you marks if they know!. Mine did!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
A sundown, a nightfall, the dark, the night, Www@QuestionHome@Com
A blood thirsty animal, bent on killing!. (yes, it needs some work, but you can mke it your own)!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
A murderer as merciless and ruthless as Death itself!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
A monster, a god-complexed insane genius!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Killing machineWww@QuestionHome@Com
Hi Narnia,
Care for an edit as well!?
There are three rules for writing you need to commit to memory:
1!. Avoid the Cliche!.
2!. Omit Needless Words!.
3!. Never (EVER) use the passive voice!.
Be evocative, but be original!. For example!.!.!.
Your opening sentence has a strange mixture of active and passive elements!. How about!.!.!.
"He remembered her shrieking, terrified voice as the stiletto blade tore into her heart!." This is more to the point!.
"Razor sharp!?" "Cold blooded murderer!?" It's a cliche!. "Chest cavity impaling her!?" It's bad syntax and wordy -- drop it!.
Your next very, very long sentence is all passive voice!. Your killer needs to be the center of attention, not his emotions or experiences!.
"Limpid eyes!?" The word "Limpid" means, "serene, untroubled, clear!." I doubt the victim's eyes were limpid at the moment of her murder!.
As for your metaphor, keep it simple: " a soul-less terrorist!."
Hope this helps!. Cheers!.
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