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Time seemed to have stood still as i watched at what was before me!. There standing was a small woman , all in tears!.
"Stay away!" she screamed!.
The pounding at the door kept going!.
"Leave me alone!"
The door still rattled as he kept pounding!.
She turned to get to the phone, not hearing the shatter of glass!.
He grabbed her from behind and threw her on the couch!. She covered her head with her arms to save her face!. He hit harder and she screamed louder!.
"SHUT UP!" he demanded!.
She kept on screaming!.
"Help it's him!"
She fought with all her strength, soon tiring out!. He was too much for the tiny frame!. She lay still, all the time thinking on how to get away!.
"I need a smoke!." she told him!.
"I'll let you go if you promise not to run!?" asking her this between clinched teeth!.
"I promise!" knowing full well that this promise she would not keep!.
She starts to lean over to get that smoke!. She felt his rugged hand on her chest pushing hard against her!. She was almost laying down on the couch again!. He straightens her back up to where she was sitting straight again!.
"Don't make any sudden moves like that again!. YOU HEAR ME!?"
He lights the cigarette for her!.
As he does this, she steals the opportunity to run!. She gets to the door!.
Her hands are trembling as she tries the knob!.
"Oh, no!. It's locked!" she panics!. Her fingers try to turn that lock!.
Pain hits her!. He has grabbed her hair,dragging her once again to the couch!. She kicks at him!. He stands up as she is fighting!. She sees him move his arm to the back of his pants!. He pulls a knife out!.
He throws her to the floor!.
Once again grabbing her hair!.
She screams!
The knife is at her throat!.
She puts her hand on his hand that is holding the knife and pushes with all her strength!.
She stopped the screaming!. She didn't have time!.
"What's wrong!?" says a voice she knows so well!.
"It's him! Run get help!"
He was so crazy with hate,that he didn't hear the knock at the door!.
The woman's friend comes in
Grabbing the crazed man and pulls him off of her!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Well, for a true story, it's deep and hurtful!. You must have gone through a living hell on this part of your life!. My heart goes to you for I to have suffered at the hand of a man also!. ((HUGS))Www@QuestionHome@Com

the whole situation is extremely unrealistic, one minute the guy is calm, the next hes bloodthirsty, its too confusing!. you shouldn't have to make the reader work to understandWww@QuestionHome@Com

Has this book been published!?

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I have to admit
I have never made a promise "not to run"
that I have kept!.
Nor, any promise made under duress!.

Good luck with your masterpiece

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That was a promise that didn't need to be kept, because it was stated under false pretenses!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

A very cold reality slap in the face!. You are a very brave woman and you have my respect!. You are truly special!. Bless your heart!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very good kept me spellbound!. Just let us know when its on the shelf at the bookstore!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

needs to be more descriptive, but it's good mostly!. :-)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow!! I couldn't stop reading! More, More!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yes i broke one and i felt bad about itWww@QuestionHome@Com

Sounds great!.!.!. I like it!.!.!.

And, btw, I haven't broken my promises yet!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very good; compels us to want more!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

needs work --use this as a rough draftWww@QuestionHome@Com

I admire that you are able to share a difficult story!. you made me feel I was there with you!. keep writing my friend!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I have some problems with this!.

Your sentences are too short; it doesn't explain much!. I had a hard time figuring out what you wanted to get across the reader!.

There are some grammatical errors!.

"!.!.!.asking her this between CLENCHED teeth!."

Keep on writing so you will improve more!

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