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Question: Pleez help me with something REALLY important!?
Now I am in a section where my character, (Gregory) is about to transform into a wolf-like beast (not a warewolf) he must be on all fours, but anyways, it is in first person and he is trying to protect his younger sister who is uncauntiouse!. It is night time, and this will be his "First" time transforming!.!.!. I don't know how I can describe it, since it is in first person!.!.!. Can someone give me pointers, or written examples!. PLEEZ! I need help! ASAP!Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
How about something like!.!.!. "I had not idea what was coming over me, I felt a revoltiong feeling inside of me; worse than falling ill with pnemonia!. I fell to the ground, throwing up my remains from dinner!. M-my sister!. I had to protect her, I-!. Everything was black, was I dead!? No, I felt the air in the night, I felt the trees staring at me, I felt myself on the ground shaking!. This was torture, I was trapped in a black tunnle of pain!. I threw up some more!. What was coming over me!? The blackness soon subsided, but I saw things in a different way; clearer, more vivid, more!.!.!.beast like!. I looked down, I had paws, hairy paws, I had transformed!. Where was she!? My sister!? I need to save her!"Www@QuestionHome@Com

Well maybe you good describe it like this
The ocean of golden fury and fire rippled around my body and ripped through my chest giving the feeling of freedom!. It coated me like honey thick and sticky and hard to get off, slowly oozing after the explosion, healing the wound and soothing!.
Something like that just make it sparkle with really good words and similes
I really like your idea
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