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Question: Please could I have your opinions on this!?
This is what I have so far!. PLEASE, any feedback will be GREATLY appreciated!. :)

All it took was one second!. One moment of panic!. One slip of the wheel!. One missed beat!. One twist of fate!. It took so little!. It took our lives!.

You sat!. Eager!. Your hands lay naturally on your swelling stomach, cradling the unknown!. Tapping your heels together you tried to contain your excitement!. You always tried to hide that giggle!. It would escape from the corner of your lips and infectiously we’d both chuckle with each other!. I watched you and found I became mesmerized, simply by you!. The sweet sent of your hair, your hazel eyes, so deep, so teasing !. Your eyes!. That’s what I love about you!. How often did I tell you that!? I’ll never stop loving you!. Both of you!.

Irresponsible again we put in the CD and reminded ourselves of our teenage years!. We acted on impulse, loving the thrill of rule breaking!. We were teenage calamities!. Still possessing a negligent nature, we turned up the volume all the way and engulfed ourselves in our language!. We both sang, out of tune and out of time, but perfectly!. 3 tracks later and that song came on!. That’s when it happened!. Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
That's amazing! Wow, hun, you could catch a career writing, they is incredible!!

Keep writing!

Oh, P!.S!. Some of the punctuation is wrong but it's still good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!!!! really good!.!.!. keep writingWww@QuestionHome@Com

This is very good I totally like it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com