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Question: Am i good writer read this short paragraphe and tell me!.!.!?
I stood in front of our house!. A wooden, squared, bulky house, with a red bricked chimney !.The stench of dry ember indicated that it didn't witness any kind of smoke, even on winter's most pinching nights!.
The coldness that dwelled in my mother's and my heart was lurking inside since a very long time!. three years have passed since his death!. My father he died !.I can't help thinking of his aquiline face !.sturdy, broad chest, where he used to hug me!. And when he kissed me ,his brown,thick moustache tackled me tenderly on my plumb cheeks!.
Tears rolled the moment his voice echoed in my head
"take care , I love you jake"
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
You are a great writer!. Very descriptive!. I love your use of adjectives and proverbs!. The only thing I would recommend for you is to check your grammar!. But that would be the only thing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

So far what you have written sounds fantastic!. I am interested to find out what happens next in the story!. You should continue to write and submit it for publishing!. Good luck!Www@QuestionHome@Com

The first paragraph is excellent and doesn't need changing!.
on the other hand, the second paragraph sounds awkward!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You are a great writer, with many good details and adjectives!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it seems interesting and it has good descriptionsWww@QuestionHome@Com

not really but lmao her dad kissed her PEDAFILE!!!! however u spell it LMAOWww@QuestionHome@Com