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Question: Is this a good story beginning!? Why did you come to that decision!?
After an emotional goodbye, I left my mother to go live with my third cousin who lives in Pforzheim, Germany!. The first time I heard that name, I snickered!. Reason being, Pforzheim is close to the German word for “fart”!. As I waved goodbye to north America, I felt around in my carry-on bag!. It had some candy bars, a parka, a book named Eclipse, and a journal to record my findings!. And if you’re wondering why I’m going to Germany, I’m going there to study exotic animals only available in Germany!.
“Off to many germs I go,” I started singing
I saw my mom wave goodbye and wiped her tears away from her face!. A real emotional goodbye!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
it okay, but not amazing, of course its not my type of book thoughWww@QuestionHome@Com

I think you need to vary your setences and add more detail!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

when you feel that it is good for you; go ahead by referring your heart!.Www@QuestionHome@Com