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Question: Is this story good!? (It's Mine)!?
Well, i wrote this story when i was 8!. I found it in My closet!. there where several papers with storys!. well, My mom said i loved writting then when i was young!. So heres the story:

The Depression of Sadness
Chapter 1

“Karen!” Cried Sandra from outside

“What!? Sorry but I’m to busy to deal with you’re stupid problems right now, I have some of My own!.” Said Karen

“But I saw a ghost! It was disappearing in those windows!”

Sandra pointed to the Hotel window that covered almost the whole building!.

“Sandra!” Cried Karen

“Stop with that foolishness! You’re Twelve, Not an eight year old!”

“Karen I really did! I’m serious!” Shouted Sandra!.

Tears Started spreading over her Breathtaking face!.

“Why don’t you Believe me!?”

“I’m not stupid Sandra!. You should know better”

“But Karen!”

“No Buts! Go and!.!.Find proof or Something would you!?” said Karen

Sandra covered her face with her hands, and took of her tears!.

“Fine! Don’t call me if you need any help! I’ll be too busy with fame!” said Sandra!.

The next night, was a starry night!. A night Like no other in Sandra’s neighborhood!. All the night creatures came out from shelter and into the gloomy darkness!. And that’s when it Happened!. Midnight horrors would soon become real!. Like a thief in the night, No one would notice!.

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Pretty cool story!! But I want know what else is going to happen!.!.!.!. LOL Are you on any writing sites!? I'm on Chapteread!.com it's great there!!! I'll look for your story!! Good Luck!Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's not very long, but if you wrote it when you were eight, it's pretty impressive!. Especially the detail and and similes/metaphors!. Sort of depressing though, don't you think, that an eight year old would write of such painstaking things!. Very impressive though, very impressive indeed!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's pretty good, especially for an eight year old!. Though for an eight year old even, there were some grammar and spelling errors!. I like it though!. You should revise this part, lengthen it, build on it, and make a book!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's pretty good, especially for someone only eight!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is definitley a GREAT story! If it was a book I would buy the book!
If you ever complete it I would LOVE to read it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it don't sound like some thing a 8 year old would but its ok the ending is kinda dumbWww@QuestionHome@Com