what do you think so far of my writing!?
I walked slowly up the concrete pathway that led to my best friend Amy’s house!. Every step I took brought me closer to the door and it only made me want to run away even more!. I took a deep breath as I gradually made it up her front steps!. I lifted my finger into the air and slowly moved my finger towards their doorbell!. I could hear the bell ring throughout their house; the sound seemed to echo through my head!.
I turned my head to the side and looked through my mother’s windshield to see her smiling face!. I’m doing this for us!. I can do this!. I kept telling myself over and over again as I waited for the door to open!. I could hear the footsteps getting louder as they came closer towards the front door!. The door creaked open and Amy stepped through the doorway!.
“Hi!. Uh, why are you here!?” She asked!. “Do you want to come in!?”
I stood there frozen, just staring at my only friend!. She was the one person that actually accepted me here in New Jersey other than my own mother!. The person I told all of my secrets too!. The one person I could go to for anything and I knew she would be there!. I shook my head!.
“I am in a bit of a hurry!.” I whispered!. My eyes started to fog up as the tears built up in my eyes!. I fought them back, not letting them brim over!.
“Skylar, what’s wrong!?” She asked me, starting to panic!.
How could I break the news to her!? We were just together not too long ago having a snowball fight during the first snow storm of the year!. It was rare that we got a large amount of snow in the month of November!. What my mother told me only two hours ago was the last thing I thought would happen!. It was so unexpected!.
“Amy… I’m um m-moving!.” I choked out!. The tears that fogged my eyes up before were now pouring down my face!. Those were the words that I was dreading to tell my best friend or even tell anyone I loved my whole entire life!. I saw a tear escape her eye and roll down her cheek!.
“You can’t be! We just made plans for this weekend!. We were going to go snow tubing up at my parents’ cabin!.” Amy managed to speak!.
“I just found out when my mom picked me up from your house!. I’m just as surprised as you are, Ames!.” I heard my mom honk the car horn but I ignored her!.
“Where are you going!?” She whispered as she started to wipe the tears from her face!.
I sighed!. “Maine!.”
“Maine!? Why Maine!? That’s like nowhere close to here! You can’t go!” She yelled!.
“I know!. My mom got a better job there!. She will be chief!. She couldn’t let this job offer down!. It’s what we need!. We need the money, Amy!. I wish I could stay!. I really do!. I’ve already begged to move in with my grandparents!. They live closer to you than Maine is so it would be easier to visit you!.” As soon as I mentioned my grandparents she knew that I seriously didn’t want to leave!.
I wasn’t exactly close with my family!. Actually, the last time I even saw my grandparents was when I was three years old!. The only time I ever hear from them is when they send me money for Christmas and my birthday in a card!. Ever since I was three I’ve been getting an envelope with three hundred dollars in it!. I’ve been saving that money to help my mom put me through college when I go in a year and a half!. If she knew that’s what I was planning on doing she would make me spend it right this second!.
The only other family I have is my father!. My mom was an only child just like I am!. So that means I don’t have any aunts, uncles, or even cousins!. I’ve not once in my life met my father!. My mother had me at the very young age of fifteen!. She was a freshman in high school when she got pregnant at the age of fourteen!. She gave birth to me a month after her fifteenth birthday and her second month in her sophomore year!. When he found out my mom was pregnant his parents packed up and moved far away!.
My mother has raised me all alone since I was three years old!. When she moved out at eighteen it was because of me!. My grandparents didn’t help her raise me and didn’t support her when she was pregnant with me!. Since she ran away from home with me at eighteen she had to pay her own way through college!. I remember going to class with her, going to work with her, and everywhere else she had to be!.
this is only like the first few paragraphs and it doesnt really give you any idea of what will happen in the future of the book!. I just want to know if my style of writing, or the way I write, yadda yadda yadda is good or will be publishing material!.
you can be mean I dont care!. just tell me if its horrible or if it has potential!.
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