Her date was pleasant enough, but she knew that if her life was a movie this guy would be buried in the credits as something like "Second Tall Man!."
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Position:Home>Books & Authors> How is this for a first line for my new book.?Question: How is this for a first line for my new book!.!? Her date was pleasant enough, but she knew that if her life was a movie this guy would be buried in the credits as something like "Second Tall Man!."
I feel that the first line must draw the reader in!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: It's actually really creative! But the second part is a little confusing!. If the next line expands on the first it should be good otherwise try to re-word it!. Good luck!:)Www@QuestionHome@Com i like it but maybe get rid of "something like" and just put "Her date waws pleasant enough, but she knew that if her life waws a movie this guy would be buried in the credits as "Second Tall Man!." it's good :)Www@QuestionHome@Com Her date was pleasant enough, but she knew that if her life was a movie her date would be buried in credits such as the "Second Tallest Man!." i made a few changes!. i really like that line!. very creative!Www@QuestionHome@Com The date was pleasant enough, but she knew that if her life was a movie this guy would turn up in the credits as something like "Tall Man #2"!.Www@QuestionHome@Com That's from the competition where people had to make up really bad analogies!. People thought it was from real high school essays!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I like it!. Www@QuestionHome@Com yeah cool!Www@QuestionHome@Com |