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Question: I was writting this story just now remeber its not chapter one i am jumping into a middle of a story!?
And so the darkness was for nights i was trapped in a chamber with couple of other men!.
There were 4 of them one was half dead eaten by rats,and a rich blond boy who was praying to his god while the other two were rotting!.
The only thing that kept me alive was her emotion her face her love towards me i felt so cold but on the other hand warm!. Because i knew i would kiss her lips and we would be lovers reunited again!.
Well yea i am 14 years old and this is a Horror/love story you don't see them often and P!.S anybody know of a good Fantasy/romance novel or story!? i am lookin for a good book :P Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Well, you need an editor!. Comma splices galore in here!.
"And so the darkness was for nights!. I was trapped in a chamber with couple of other men!.
There were four of them!. One was half dead, eaten by rats, another a rich blond boy who was praying to his god, while the other two were rotting!.
The only thing that kept me alive was her emotion, her face, her love towards me!. I felt so cold, but on the other hand, warm, because I knew I would kiss her lips and we would be lovers reunited once more!."
Some of the things I changed are style choices, so you may have to reedit by editing to your liking!. Other than grammatical errors, it's pretty good!. I think it'll make an interesting story for sure!. Good luck, and keep writing!
For your other question, I think you'd like Eragon by Christopher Paolini and definitely Immortal by Traci L!. Slatton!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
you'll have heard of it!.!.
it's a horror/love story!.!.
the title is:
TWILIGHT!
it is soooooooooooooo good!!!
it continues with New Moon, Eclipse and Breaking Dawn!.!.!.it's a fantastic saga!Www@QuestionHome@Com
That makes an interesting story except i dont think thats the middle i think it should be the preface kinda how stephenie meyer (the author of twilight) does her books so yah Www@QuestionHome@Com