Do i have a good writing style?

Question: Do i have a good writing style!?

well i love writing, and wanted to make a more mature and well written story, and i was wondering if my stle wqas good!. thanks! (oh and do u think the story is good!?)
btw this story is copyrighted!!
http://www!.fictionpress!.com/s/2573545/1/!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

If you're wondering strictly about the style, I do have to admit that I think you do have a lot of potential!.

There are many grammar mistakes and some improvements that could be made, but I honestly did like where you were going with it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Your English is good!. However, practically every sentence starts with "I", and the piece as a whole is a lot of teenage angst without a real narrative point, and nothing stands out as unusual among that, so the overall effect is strikingly shallow!.

Ask yourself: what is the environment you are trying to create, what is the emotional connection with the audience, and why should they care!?

Keep going!.!.!. you're way ahead of most writers!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's pretty good, i dont like teen stories usually!.
-LivvyWww@QuestionHome@Com