Well, what I've started!.!.!.and please review (on the site) because you don't have to register!. =]
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please! muchos gracias!!!! =] http://www!.fictionpress!.com/s/2556094/1/!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: your writing needs some general editing to make it sound smoother and more fluent!. i think your sentences were too long in some places, and you would be better off breaking them into two parts!. but writing is mostly revision, after all good luck! *celebrindal* p!.s!. i like your name- is that from avenged sevenfold's unholy confessions!? love that song :)Www@QuestionHome@Com umm i was 2 lazy to read the whole passage but from waht i read i really liked it! keep it upWww@QuestionHome@Com I think it was well written!. :] Www@QuestionHome@Com |