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Question: Is this a good start !?
for a fiction story i'm writing i'm only 12 so plz don;t be mean thax !

My story begins in london where i had been born and raised in an old house that my familly has inherated !.

The house i live in is georgeous and has a great lake view !.i have huge problumes in this house,
at night i can hear heavy foot steps up in the attic and the downstairs computer's keyboard being tapped over and over ,i feel as if a someone is watching me wating to attack at the right instant! !.Iam easily scared so i would never have the courage to go check out what's happening , so i lay in bed terrified just watting for morning time to come!.

I also have an even bigger problume ,I can feel the spirits around me as they whisper my name "emily!emily! help us!"!.Ialso felt the same thing at my old house but those spirits were very friendly and peaceful ,just worried about their familly!.In thishouse i feel something even darker and heavier !.Both my parents have passed away this year from a freak car accident,i don't know why but i feel that my mom is content and okay but my dad's spirit is still in the house !.Ihave to sleep!but i can never sleep at the feeling of something terrifying in this house!and i am afraid of what they will show me !.I have consaulted a therapist but it turns out that i am normal !.!.!.not crazy ,Ican even read my dreams and take them very seriously, they are like immortal visions!. iam scared of what they will tell me, I feel like they are trying to tell me something and are following me around but subconciously I dont want to know!. I love helping people and animals in anyway I can and have seen some very horrible things, but I cant handle whatever it is they want to tell me!. What can I do!? i have asked this question many times to different people especially my gurdian jane but nobody seems to understand !.I feel that they are demons so i pray to jesus "save my soul o lord!"
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Go for it!!! I'm 12 too and i came up with an idea!. But anyway back to your case!. AWESOME!!!! I need more!!! Thanx for putting it on!. It's fantastic!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Go for it! At least it's not vampires!!! Good luck!Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's really great!!! I'm 13, but I write like that and I did when I was 12!.
The only thing I can say is, i think you should start the sentences differently!. It's always I THINK or I something and that was my problem when i wrote!! :P
I want to know more :PWww@QuestionHome@Com