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'His mind was racing!. Was she going to die!? No, no!. She couldn't die!. She was going to be okay!. He was going to be okay!. Everything was going to fine!. Yeah!.!.!. yeah!.!.!.
But she bleeding so much, Scott wasn't sure they'd be able to save her!. That damn shark had taken out a massive chunk of her leg!. He wondered if it was possible to lose enough blood to die just from a shark bite!. No, of course it wasn't!. Jamie couldn't die!. They were going to have the rest of their lives together!. Kids, dog, white picket fence, the whole shebang!. Jamie was tough, she'd make it through!.
"Scott!.!.!." The whisper of his name was delicate and soft, as though every fibre of her being, every ounce of strength she had left had gone into it!. "Scott!.!.!."
"What is it!?" he asked!. Blood was soaking through the bandages now, and dampening the thigh if his jeans!. "What is it, sweetheart!?"
Every breath of Jamie's was laboured and difficult!. She was almost gone, he could tell!. "I!.!.!. I!.!.!."
"What!?" He was shaking with fear and anger!. Anger at that damn shark!. Anger at the paramedics, who couldn't save her now!. Anger at the world!. Why was this happening to him, why now!? He loved her! "What is Jamie, sweetheart!? Anything you want, anything, right now, I'll give it to you!." He was willing to give anything, just for Jamie to get her dying wish!.
"I love you, Scott!."
"I love you, too Jamie!."
"Remember me," she whispered shallowly!.
"No, no Jamie! Jamie, please! Look, we have the rest of our lives! Don't you want to stay!? Don't you want to be with me!?" The emotion was flowing out of him now!. "Come on, Ja-"
"No," she whispered!. "No!. I do want that!. But I have to go now!. I love you, remember that always!."
She was going now!. She looked pale and sickly, but she was just as beautiful as ever!. Her auburn (or whatever colour) hair was glued to her face with sweat, but it was the most beautiful colour he'd ever seen!. Her once rosy cheeks were now a cold gray, but it couldn't mask her lovely face anymore than anything else!. Her full, red lips were paler now, almost blue!. But she was still so pretty!. So, so pretty!.
He cursed that shark, the paramedics, the lifeguard, God!. He cursed himself!. He should have been able to save her!.
"Jamie!.!.!. Jamie!" There was no reply!.
He leaned over and gave her one last loving, tender kiss!. He would remember and treasure her always!.
"I love you!.!.!." he whispered!. He did, and he always would!.'

I hope I helped! Good luck with your story!

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I'll get to the part on the way to the hospital!.!.!. ((btw, I love the story!.)) I'm going to make it short and sweet!. don't over extend people dying, or the reader's will loose interest in the character!. also, expand on this idea!.


As he holds her hand, she looks up into his eyes!. "I'm going to miss you!. I love you so much," she says softly!. "I always wished I would be with you until I die!."

"Don't say that!. Please, please, don't say that!." He starts to cry!. "Jamie, I love you!."

She tightens her grip on his hand!. "Stay with me, please!. I need you!."
He nods as tears roll down his face!. Slowly losing her hold on life, she closes her eyes and takes a deep breath for one last time!.!.!.

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you asked a similar question before!.!.!.
and ' want Jamie to be as pretty as always when she's dying!.'
not at all!. shes friggin dying!.!.!.!?



just describe how porcelain her skin looks without the flush of blood in her cheeks!. how fragile she seemed!. lifeless!. fake!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

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