How does my story sound so far?

Question: How does my story sound so far!?

http://www!.writerscafe!.org/writing/inkhe!.!.!.

I'd appreciate it if you'd take the time to read through all three chapters!. They're pretty short, anyway!. But if not, well, your loss!. =)Www@QuestionHome@Com

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wow!.!.!. i absolutely love it!.!.!.!.the girl isnt one of those perfect preps shes seems like some1 to relate to!.!.!.!.if you have more plz email it to me just go to my page

ur reaaaaaaaaaaaaaaalllllllllllllllllllllyy!.!.!. good :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

The story seems pretty good so far, but I would make it into 2 chapters instead of three!. Try cutting the first part of Ch!. 2 and adding it to Chapter one, then combine Chapters 2 & 3 and add a little more in between the two!. The shift from the locker room to math class seems a little abrupt!. Anyway, sounds good - keep going!Www@QuestionHome@Com

ok, that was a good story!. i liked it!. Maybe for length u could add more events to the chapter if it was going to be a regular book!. in the first chapter i didn't want to read anymore b/c i could feel her pain!. which is good, you don't want to be boring when you describe something like that!. keep writing i want to read more!:)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it! I want to read more! Will you post more on here(in link form like that one) so we can read the full story,when your done!? :D I like the story so far!.

To moonbow: The plot is to realistic!!! I know someone like the main character Jamie!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's very well done! I would work on the first few paragraphs though, I think you need to articulate them better, but apart from that it's really really good! and you have some beautiful phrazes in there!. I hope you finish it off, i wanna read more :]Www@QuestionHome@Com

DAMN! You have talent, keep going and if you ever stop I hope somebody takes you over their lap and spanks the living **** out of you!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I read it all!.!. Don't like it very much!.

But more description into it!. How would he know!? The plot!.!. isn't even really realistic!. Make it HAPPEN!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it was ok!. not my type of book, but well written!.Www@QuestionHome@Com