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It's called Where Destiny Leads You!.

Chapter 1- Trivial Arguments

I was just an ordinary school nerd… with long dark brown wavy hair, red glasses, and of course—a 4!.0 GPA!. Yes, all straight A’s with the exception of an A- in P!.E!. Luckily, 90% was based on effort or else I would have been dead meat!. My clumsy hands, painfully slow legs… my overweight body!.
“Who cares about that when they had an A+ in Honors Math and English!.!.!. Rank 1 in the entire school, right!?” I thought as I dismissed my weakness!. I was lucky… I had all the friends I needed… who would help me in times of despair and hopelessness!. I was lucky to have parents who cared for me, teaching me many life morals and lessons!.
The phone rang as it disrupted my thoughts!. “Hey Honey, wanna go out with me!?” I groaned!. It was Jonny, the flippant and arrogant jerk!. He flirted with everyone… dated many popular girls for a month after dumping them!. I guessed he just wanted their body!.
“Hmm!.!.!.maybe I could teach him a lesson orWww@QuestionHome@Com

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