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Question: Does this sound good!? (for the beginning of my short story)!?
It all started with Six!. Six people who all happened to be on the midnight bus, for very different reasons!. A bus driver, a runaway girl, a man who was about to become a father, a senior citizen, an illegal immigrant and a woman who had done many things she wasn’t proud of!. All of them had a specific destination they wanted to get to, and all of them didn’t pay any mind to the suspicious man in the back of the bus wearing a long black jacket with his hand pulling out a gun…
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so basically whats going to happen is i'm going to write about what all six characters are thinking and how they got on the bus right before he pulls out the gun
i!.e Sally was a runaway, her parents and her didn't agree on stuff, blah blah blah(really bad example, but you get the point) So I'll constantly be switching from 3rd person to 1st person
Any suggestions!?
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It's a great idea, better than most i've heard on yahoo answers!. My only suggestion is not to mentio0n that the man pulled ou a gun!. Instead say something like " and a man with a long black coat with his hand placed suspiciously in his pocket!.!.!.!." I think this would create more suspense!.
If your going to do it in 1st person then do alll the charecters in first person like eachperson with a chapter and use the part you just showed us as like a prolouge or 'The Beginning and the End"!.!.!.
I hope you get that last part!.!.!.
Good Luck! =)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Sounds good, but in the end I think you should have a first person of the guy with a gun and what he's thinking, and how he came to be on the bus, and why he's got a gun to begin with!. It would be very interesting to compare all their thoughts!. Send it to me when you're done :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Sounds very interesting!. I think the most important decision you have to make!. as you say it will be 1st and 3rd person, is which character is you!. I think whichever character you choose shouldn't be the main man in your tale, but one of the characters who is more of an onlookerWww@QuestionHome@Com
Dude, this is good so far!. (:
I was hooked throughout the whole beginning!.!.!. then it ended!. hahaWww@QuestionHome@Com
Wow!.!.!.that's FANTASTIC! You definitely build up tension as to what these six people did!. My question is the length of the book: how are you going to be able to fit in all the six people's stories without drifting too far away from the "suspicious man in the back of the bus!.!.!.!.with his hand pulling out a gun"!? also doing 3rd person to 1st person format is difficult to do!.!.!.you may end up confusing the readers as to which person is in attention!.
Six stories is a lot to tell in a book, so I'm only concerned about the pages!. But why do I have a say in this: I think it's a brilliant idea, and you're free to write whatever you want!.
Just be sure no one else is taking that idea! hahaWww@QuestionHome@Com