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Question: What do you think of my plot for a summer paper i have to write!?
i don't feel like getting to into details cause i have enough work ahead of me as it is!. its about a 10 year old boy and his 6 year old sister!. there family is hugely in dept and they are planning on selling him away to forced labor to help pay their depts, not that they want to do it!. the boy, fearing for his life and what will be his sister's eventual fate, takes her and runs away successfully!. after about a week on the streets scrapping what they can, they boy eventually starves to death!. the reason the girl didn't die was that he had secretly given up some of his food to make sure that she had enough food!. sortly after his death, the police find her and she ends up getting taken home kicking and screaming the whole way there, where, in the end, she will be put into forced labor in place of her brother!. thats the end of the story but just so you know, the boy dies pretty close to the end of the story so there isn't much about the 6 year old girl after his death!. what do you think and if you have any ideas to add or something to change please tell me, i want a good grade after all!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


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Summer paper!? I don`t envy you!.

I like it, but I would like to know what happens to the girl!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Where and/or when is your story set!? It's an interesting plot, but you'll need to make sure the readers will buy into the whole forced labor thing with your setting!. The part where the boy starves to death so his sister can live is a little cliche, but it's a nice twist to have her end up in the situation he was trying to protect her from!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!

I think you should focus on the girl more after the brothers death!. You said there isn't much about her!. You should tap into her emotions, and make the readers feel what she's feelingWww@QuestionHome@Com

It sounds really interesting!.Www@QuestionHome@Com